Planning Storyboard for my Dasani commercial

Prior to storyboarding, I first brainstormed on a loose-leaf sheet of paper, and then I transferred all my drawings plus my ideas to the storyboard sheet. The first scene would have a close-up shot of me placing down the water bottle and the jump rope to the ground. The location of this scene will be outside in my apartment hallway. I will also have another scene of my brother who will be an actor placing down his books on the table. This scene will be taking place inside of the house in the kitchen at the dining table. The second scene/box shows me jumping rope.  Again, this scene will be outside. In this scene, I will be wearing athletic clothing such as a cotton t-shirt, leggings, and sneakers. For this scene, I will be using a full shot so that I am shown in the frame. The third box/scene shows my brother on the table writing in a notebook or sheet of paper. I will use a pan to just reveal who is at the table and what that person is doing. This scene would be shot from the chest up and my brother will be wearing casual clothes. In the fourth scene/box, I will have my sister walk up the stairs. If the video for that scene comes out too long, I will have her run up the stairs to speed it up. She will be wearing casual clothes and carrying a Dasani water bottle. For this shot, I will film this from the top of the stairs, so I will be shooting from a high angle and use a long shot. This scene will be taking place outside on the apartment stairs. The fifth scene/box will have all the actors including me be filmed drinking water. I will try to edit the video to have everyone seen side by side. All of us will be shot from a low angle drinking from a water bottle. The sixth scene/box will have a screen with the Dasani bottle and the product slogan. I will record a voice-over of me saying "Treat yourself well, every day, with the pure fresh taste of Dasani water."